From a cloudburst;
Beginning with the premise that a hokku is a sensory experience of Nature and the place of humans within Nature, set in the context of the season, we can see that every hokku is really a verse about a season, whether written at the beginning, the middle, or the end of a season. So though we do not use “titles” as such in hokku, nonetheless every hokku really has one of four “titles”: Spring, Summer, Autumn (or Fall) and Winter.
We already know that a hokku is a sensory experience. But how do we extract that experience from everything else that is happening at the time? It is not difficult. We look for the essentials of the experience. In the hokku above, for example, there is the cloudburst, there is the warm rain, and there is the time of year — spring nearing its end. That is all we require.
The interesting thing is that when we put these elements together, they have a sense of significance far beyond what each would have individually. Let’s look again:
From a cloudburst;
Everything here is in harmony. The rain is a part of spring, but its warmth tells us that spring is soon to give way to heat of summer, when the warmth will increase and the rain will diminish or be absent. So each element by itself, or even two of the elements together, is not sufficient to give us the whole picture. It takes the combination of all to be effective.
We must, however, know when to stop. We could add more of what is happening at the time, but in this case more would be less — the weight of detail would become too much, and would detract from the simplicity and directness of the experience. That is why hokku are very brief. Hokku, essentially, are just the fewest words necessary to convey a “whole” experience without detracting from that whole or adding unnecessary elements to it.
If one ponders this and puts it into application in writing verses, one will readily advance in writing hokku. A hokku is not just a verse that happens to be brief. There is a reason. Nor is it just a verse that happens to be divided into two parts. There is also a reason for that. Make it shorter, make it longer, and it loses both ways.